My heart suffered a near puncture,
at the depth of your indifference towards me,
For nothing could be meaner than the everlasting pain you left on me ...
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- shruti
- I feel like a tiny 'DOT' in this vast expanse of d world,trying hard to make it visible.I like to live in d dungeons of my mind.M focussed & like d pole star(rigid yet so bright).Life for me is a relentless struggle,a pursuit of wisdom not of power!
Strong words and well-expressed...
ReplyDeleteSuggestion: last line could be 'pain you leave on me'...that would sound better :)
keep writing...
Cheers
Rajesh
that depends on whether ur referring to your present/past state!well in my case it was past so i still prefer "left" than "leave" !!
ReplyDeletestill thnx 4 d feedback.taken and appreciated.